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Posted by alesta on October 1, 2004, at 19:31:39
It is that affable, cognizant smile
Which breaks on his exquisite visage
That speaks many volumes
Of an eternity spent in dazzling unison,
His warm, beckoning body presses against mine,
As he strokes me softly
With the most alluring, adoring touch,
His eyes are locked with my own
Unveiling unrelenting, infatuous desire
As he softly whispers and murmurs sweet nothings
In a formidable world monopolized by madness
In the eternal, unfathomable darkness,
Waiting for the triumphant daylight
To deflect its remarkable iridescence
Upon the desolate enveloping landscape
-Amy
Posted by zeugma on October 2, 2004, at 18:32:10
In reply to Godsend (My first poem), posted by alesta on October 1, 2004, at 19:31:39
amy,
if only the moments of iridescence could last. Sometimes it seems to make the desolation worse when there is something to contrast it with. Sometimes I think I see a peculiar beauty in desolation. But the moments that make the world more than two-dimensional- those are too rare. Will you share your second poem with us, too?
-z
Posted by alesta on October 3, 2004, at 9:13:44
In reply to Re: Godsend (My first poem) » alesta, posted by zeugma on October 2, 2004, at 18:32:10
hi, zeugma,
i'm shocked! alas! some feedback! zeugma, i knew i could count on you! :) i wasn't going to write another one, but since i got a response, maybe i will do another. (writing for the sake of writing doesn't inspire me, or probably, anyone. i need someone to actually read it.)
you know, i don't know why i based this poem around romance. i'm really not much of a romantic lately, in the sense that i wrote about..i think the right words can be more seductive than the stereotypical idea of romance. i guess i thought it might draw the reader in. i think the end of my poem, which centers away from this, is better. maybe i'll focus on the theme of the emotional realm or relationships sans romance next time..more interesting, less cheesy.
take care zeug!
aimee :)
Posted by alesta on October 3, 2004, at 12:03:49
In reply to Re: Godsend (My first poem) » alesta, posted by zeugma on October 2, 2004, at 18:32:10
hi again,
just wanted to tell you that i'll let you know when i write my next poem, so you don't have to keep checking back here, as you normally don't frequent this board, i don't think.:-)
aimee
Posted by zeugma on October 3, 2004, at 21:03:16
In reply to Re: Godsend (My first poem)--i'll inform you.., posted by alesta on October 3, 2004, at 12:03:49
thanks aimee, it is true that i don't normally frequent this board, but venture over here occasionally to post something i've written or skim the other contributions. i do like the juxtaposition of beauty with desolation. contrast creates poignancy :)
-z
Posted by saw on October 4, 2004, at 1:42:06
In reply to Re: Godsend (My first poem)--i'll inform you.., posted by alesta on October 3, 2004, at 12:03:49
Posted by ron1953 on October 5, 2004, at 11:08:09
In reply to Godsend (My first poem), posted by alesta on October 1, 2004, at 19:31:39
Amy:
I'm sorry it took so long for me to get over here and read your poem. I think it's very beautiful and evocative.
I took to writing free-form poetry (never wrote poetry before) as part of my divorce recovery, although I haven't written anything in a while. Maybe it's a good sign that I'm getting through the grief process pretty well. But you've inspired me to review the stuff I wrote and perhaps share it here.
Ron
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