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Posted by Jai Narayan on September 24, 2004, at 21:42:28
My beloved husband and I paddled down the river
we glided over the reflected cloud of pink
with not a breath of wind in the air
we saw an arc of rainbow in the frolicking clouds
too soon came the descending darkness
a pale yellow moon made her way over the oak tree
black birds in the elephant grass were singing with changeling voices
their wings beats upon our approach quickened my heart
the shape of six wood ducks took flight
we could hear their plaintiff cry
the night was perfumed with burning wood
a flash of tiny silver fish jumped out of the still water
creating circles edged with the color of the moonJai
Posted by Phil on September 24, 2004, at 23:50:14
In reply to circles edged with the color of the moon, posted by Jai Narayan on September 24, 2004, at 21:42:28
"a flash of tiny silver fish jumped out of the still water
creating circles edged with the color of the moon"Jai
That is kick***! Props to you for writing it and thanks for sharing it. You never know whose life you may touch with your words.
Phil
Posted by Atticus on September 25, 2004, at 7:12:52
In reply to circles edged with the color of the moon, posted by Jai Narayan on September 24, 2004, at 21:42:28
Gorgeous imagery and your keen eye for atmospheric detail. You write haiku, just not in the traditional haiku form. Which I like, because I don't adhere to any particular form in my own poems, mixing rhythm and rhyme with free verse and storytelling at will. This poem in particular, though, really captures a moment in time vividly for all the senses. ;) Atticus
Posted by saw on September 27, 2004, at 5:06:45
In reply to Re: circles edged with the color of the moon » Jai Narayan, posted by Atticus on September 25, 2004, at 7:12:52
Makes me think of the first time my husband told me he loved me and then his tears on our wedding day. (He DOES NOT cry). I felt I had come home.
I felt transported and vividly imagined your words. Gorgeous!
Sabrina
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