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Posted by malthus on August 31, 2004, at 20:02:34
Two red tongues of fire
tied to the same stem
move near each other and, upon kissing
form a single flame;two notes from the harp
at the same time the hand forces out,
and in the space approach each other
and harmoniously embrace;two waves that come together
to die upon a shore
and that, on breaking, crown each other
with a plume of silver;two long streets of mist
that from the lake rise up
and, on joining there in the sky,
form a white cloud;two ideas that flow evenly;
two kisses that at the same time explode;
two echoes that are bewildered
that is our two souls.
Posted by Jai Narayan on August 31, 2004, at 20:58:56
In reply to poem...Two and one, posted by malthus on August 31, 2004, at 20:02:34
This is the most beautiful poem I have read. My....you are awesome. I got chills and the hair on my head stood up. Yes this is so excellent. You are that flame and you are getting better and better at expressing this love....my goodness.
Posted by malthus on August 31, 2004, at 21:47:30
In reply to Re: poem...Two and one, posted by Jai Narayan on August 31, 2004, at 20:58:56
Thank you Jai. Of course the subject of this poem is about Sean (a "black" irishman like Atticus) but I feel this one is less acerbic than some of the others. I just feel that love in the end defies complete analysis. I still feel such a longing for him that is not fully conscious (a source of distress and confusion for my friends and family) and is inexplicable to me, the self-torture and self-humiliation I suffer when I contact him. I'm trying hard not to contact him; the last time was July 3rd. Evidently for some the memory of a lost love may provide the sweetness of an entire life. I'm not in that camp. Usually I feel bitter rage, unhappiness and morbid despair. It truly sucks.
However I must say that after discovering this site and being able to get some of this out has helped me tremendously.malthus
Posted by Jai Narayan on August 31, 2004, at 22:04:53
In reply to Re: poem...Two and one » Jai Narayan, posted by malthus on August 31, 2004, at 21:47:30
Posted by Atticus on September 3, 2004, at 19:44:17
In reply to poem...Two and one, posted by malthus on August 31, 2004, at 20:02:34
This is really, really a wonderful poem. And believe it or not, it's essentially about the exact same thing as my new poem below. There's even a shared metaphor. Your use of musical notes coming together in your second verse is something I use explicitly in one place (albeit in Atticus-ese) and throughout the whole poem. Obviously, two minds on the same wavelength, although, typically, you don't allow yourself to plunge into the romanticism without applying a dash of critical thinking about love's paradoxes in the final line. You are really a superb poet at this point, and you just keep getting better. I love the fact that our poetic "voices" are so different in tone; in this case, it's like the same thought expressed in two genres of music. This is fun. I really missed this over the past couple of days. :) Atticus
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