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Re: not my round » cockeyed

Posted by greyskyeyes on July 20, 2005, at 12:48:48

In reply to not my round, posted by cockeyed on July 19, 2005, at 2:55:45

Very vivid. I especially like, about halfway through, where you change your tone and describe the walk home and the mundane detail of fixing your glasses. Nice contrast. I like the other little details you randomly pop in, like the blonde ponytail of the cop and that you were drinking Guinness (good stuff!) as opposed to just beer.

Glad to hear nothing bad came of this... but please be careful cockeyed, OK? Lay off the drinking as much as you can. Not trying to preach, just concerned for you, one Babbler to another.


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