Posted by Angela2 on September 16, 2004, at 10:31:44
In reply to poem ... Dragon Scales on Subway Rails, posted by Atticus on September 15, 2004, at 20:39:47
This reminds me of some kind of beat or bohemian poem because of the words you use: subterrannean, be-bop, groovin to the beat, the hippest thing..." Is this the impression you were trying to give?
Angela
p.s. I like the rhythm! I have not studied poem form so I don't have a clue if you did it on purpose or not, but it's very catchy especially in the beginning!
> Dragon Scales on Subway Rails
>
> Polyphonic techno-symphonic quasi-cool
> Day-glo slo-mo rooster-combed fools
> Trippin’ and clickin’
> Like hypnotized chickens,
> Like graffiti apparitions
> Peeled from brownstone canvases
> And gone walkabout
> Down cement-slab high-fashion
> High-passion
> Catwalks
> Lined with weedy lots
> And supercalifragilistic chain-link vines
> Topped with ravishing razor-wire garlands
> Spun of the purest silver ribbons
> From dragon scales laid
> On subway rails
> By bebop-loving blacksmiths
> At the subterranean forges
> Hidden in the sublimely slimy
> And ferociously fiery tunnels
> Between the stations
> Where train wheels squeal out
> Sibilant triumphant sprays of orange sparks
> While groovin’ to the beat
> Of the struttin’ on the street
> Overhead
> And thinkin’,
> “Ain’t this the hippest
> Scene you ever
> Did see?”
> -- Atticus
>
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