Posted by malthus on September 11, 2004, at 10:34:44
In reply to Soft Footfalls Approaching Across Virtual Sands, posted by Atticus on September 10, 2004, at 20:25:18
Hi Atticus!
The first four words of this poem foreshadow nature and the last two words the creation of technology by man. As I examined this poem more closely I was able to count 23 words which describe nature, 26 words which describe human or animal characteristics and 24 words which describe manmade objects or concepts. There is such equilibrium between all three components which give it an appealing gestalt. There is also a resemblance to haiku in that two of the three components show a pairing of things from nature. And then there’s the poem’s theme, which illustrates the etymology of the word haiku, Japanese “hai” meaning pleasure and “ku” meaning verse, since it describes a pleasurable passing of time with another person (nature) through verse, via a computer, man’s technology. This pleasure would not exist in this medium if man had not created it.
Perfect. Thank you.
malthus
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