Posted by Atticus on September 3, 2004, at 21:26:39
In reply to Re: Time Warp Drops of Coffee-House Coolness, 1989, posted by malthus on September 3, 2004, at 20:24:02
I missed you, too. I was really struck by the thematic similarities between your last poem and mine -- especially the music metaphor of two lonely notes coming together, yours generated by harp strings and mine by the psychedelic acid rock vibrating from the strings of Jimi Hendrix's Fender Stratocaster guitar. This poem is deliberately filled with titles of and allusions to Hendrix songs and even a snatch of lyrics at the end. This time something aural -- the soundtrack that I remember playing in my head that evening (Sept. 30, 1989; I'll never forget that date) -- turned out to be the hook for me as much as anything visual. And I guess that was true with the subway train-like clickety-clack rhythm of the previous poem, which ended up turning what was originally intended as free verse into a rhyming piece, as if I were writing song lyrics. This is an interesting new development, one I didn't anticipate. I don't know if it will lead the poems in a new direction in terms of construction or not. But it is helping to begin the process of healing. It's only a start, but it's the first time I've been able to really feel good about all the positives in Alyssa's and my relationship in such a long time. It makes me feel a little less fractured, fragmented emotionally. It's good to hear you sounding ebullient. But don't hesitate to reach out when you're not, too. I hope you got my e-mail so you know where to reach me beyond Babble. :) Atticus
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