Posted by beardedlady on February 21, 2003, at 14:20:46
In reply to In need of punctuation, posted by shar on February 21, 2003, at 13:12:46
> "As you work, work for the working rather than for the fruits of the work and it becomes art and connection with the essence of being."
> Any ideas?I think the idea behind the quote is good, but I'm not a fan of the arrangement. The punctuation isn't correct, actually, as the comma before the "and" (mandatory when connecting two independent clauses with a coordination conjunction) is missing. I'd add one after "rather," too.
"As you work, work for the working, rather than the fruits of the work, and it becomes art and connection with the essence of being."
But I think the whole thing needs a major rewrite!
A quick rearrangement: When you work for work's sake, rather than for its fruits, work becomes art and connects with the essence of being.
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How say you, Shar?
beardy : )>
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