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Posted by malthus on September 28, 2004, at 14:42:19
Daybreak is a shadow of your smile,
and a beam from your eyes
the light of day,
but your soul
is a winter night,
black and frozen.
Posted by Atticus on September 28, 2004, at 16:10:04
In reply to poem...Masquerade, posted by malthus on September 28, 2004, at 14:42:19
Such heartbreaking bitterness, born of the perception of bleak and hostile inner landscapes in others (and yourself? I can't tell). On one level, it reminds me of your earliest poems on Psycho-Babble Writing, which seemed etched in electronic acid. Yet this one strikes me as carrying a tone of betrayal and anger that's deeper still -- an icy stare appears to have replaced tear-reddened eyes. Cold fury trumps hot rage in this choice of words, and the former is much more disquieting. Atticus
Posted by malthus on September 28, 2004, at 17:59:18
In reply to Re: poem...Masquerade » malthus, posted by Atticus on September 28, 2004, at 16:10:04
While your analysis is interesting, I feel I need to clarify the poem. I have come to the point where objective analysis is the healthiest way for me to deal with my relationship with Sean. I believe it is neither bleak nor hostile to recognize a quality in others that simply exists even though it may not be pretty. While at one time I constantly had tear-reddened eyes because of him, I think it is more accurate to describe my eyes as detached from someone who, objectively was unable to love me the way I needed him to. And part of that does come from him being frozen and unable to "pull the trigger" when it came to commitment. An icy stare would indicate that I am still angry and highly invested in the relationship and hoping for a reconciliation, which is not the case.
I may still have insecurities and abandonment issues but thankfully they no longer revolve around him. As for this poem I am simply calling a spade a spade.malthus
Posted by Atticus on September 28, 2004, at 19:29:39
In reply to poem...Masquerade, posted by malthus on September 28, 2004, at 14:42:19
Well, I guess all I can comment is that characterizing someone's "soul" as "a winter night, black and frozen" doesn't exactly strike me as a dispassionate, objective description devoid of anger. But that's just my two cents. Atticus
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