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Re: That's Just

Posted by cloudydaze on July 20, 2006, at 16:01:11

In reply to That's Just, posted by Atticus on June 15, 2006, at 19:51:59

Your imagery is beautiful and well-written, though very sad. Powerful words.

You have a lot of talent :)

-cloudydaze

> “That’s just
> Self-mutilation,”
> Angela tells me
> As she pushes up the sleeve
> Of her yellow hospital gown
> To reveal a criss-crossing ladder
> Of white scars left by
> The passage of razors
> Ascending the coffee-toned skin
> Of her inner left forearm,
> As casually as if
> She had said, “Those are just
> Mosquito bites.”
>
> That’s just
> self-mutilation,
> I think to myself
> As I ponder the
> Incomprehensible acts
> That have placed her
> In this psych ward beside me.
> Not a big deal,
> Her 20-year-old voice
> Flatly informs me
> In tone as well as word.
>
> It’s just
> Self-mutilation,
> My mind repeats
> As I roll up my own gown’s sleeve
> To reveal the sickly pinkish lines
> Created by sutures
> That snake
> Like lightning bolts up
> My left forearm,
> Following the faint blue veins underneath
> The scars.
>
> “This is
> Self-destruction,”
> I say, in voice low and whispery
> Like fall leaves on the pavement
> When they’re touched by
> Early winter winds.
> I want to tell her
> Not to graduate from
> Her form of disfigurement
> To mine, but I know
> She’ll only shrug and reply,
> “That’s just self-mutilation,”
> And gaze at me
> With brown and baffled eyes.
>
>


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