Posted by Atticus on December 22, 2004, at 18:16:44
In reply to All I Know, posted by AdaGrace on December 22, 2004, at 16:22:26
Hi AdaGrace,
I really like the way the repeated phrase "All I know" sets up a cadence of urgency, of relentless emotion that accelerates with the short lines at the end, as if the sense of pain is growing more intense and overpowering. The lone last line conveys to me a kind of emotional exhaustion. I think you use rhythm really well here to add an additional thread of rising hurt that entwines with the words themselves. It's almost like a building and breaking wave on the beach, which really resonates with my own experience with this kind of a sense of loss. Atticus
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