Posted by Atticus on September 17, 2004, at 12:38:11
In reply to a glass held tightly..., posted by Jai Narayan on September 16, 2004, at 14:11:05
I think the structure and the rhythm work well to create an elegiac and wistful mood. I also like the use of concrete images, such as the missing books (for the longest time, I noticed Alyssa's missing CDs from our rack), to convey concepts. Books are an especially good choice because they tend to embody the intellectual and emotional life of the owner. There is also that haiku-like quality that I've noted in your previous poems: glimpses of frozen images and moments used to create an aggregate portrait. I think this piece is very effective. :) Atticus
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