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Re: poem ... Cocoa Pebbles Madness, 1989

Posted by Jai Narayan on August 29, 2004, at 7:35:35

In reply to poem ... Cocoa Pebbles Madness, 1989, posted by Atticus on August 28, 2004, at 21:11:59

Okay I can see why you love Alyssa so much.
Lovely, delightful, scary, delicate relationship. She sounds lovely looking.
the energy between the two of you is hushed, sweet, trembling...insecure.
Why are the most delicate of relationships the very ones that we hunger after.

I will probably remember till my death, a day laying in bed with my first love. The languid fluid feel of my body after being loved so well.

Ya know, you're real good at writing....
I knew you were going to say Boo Radley...
you are so in "To Kill A Mockingbird".
Did you use some of the language in this poem from the book?

What did this writing do to you? Are you all right?

Atticus do you remember the first time you saw her?
Have you written a poem about that first moment?

As always thank you for this glimps into your life. This poem is like a luna moth...large and beautiful with dusted wings it floats into my mind.
Jai Narayan


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