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thank you for your indepth response

Posted by Jai Narayan on July 26, 2004, at 19:13:11

In reply to Re: My visit to New Orleans was so differient..... » Jai Narayan, posted by Atticus on July 25, 2004, at 21:03:47

> My approach varies from poem to poem. The first draft of "Brittle" came out in one fell swoop.
**Have I heard "Brittle" yet?
How did you find babble?
I am so enamored with your work and you are so special.
for some reason I thought your suicide attempt was years ago.

But "Cafe du Monde, April 9, 1994"

**I love this poem!
>They were like pieces of raw film footage
** your poems are very visual

>Then I remembered how badly I'd reacted to the news of Cobain's suicide while on that trip, Cobain's death brought the thoughts of suicidal ideation I'd had since age 13

**this breaks my heart....I was young and tender and thought that death was the only way out of pain.

>the description of the baby alligator heads. I wrote that verse separately, and just waited for an opening where I could include it without disrupting the flow.

**I love that sentence... "the description of the baby alligator heads"... it works in the poem. You know if it were too strong it would take all the attention away from the rest of the poem but the whole thing is so strong that is can support such a gem of a sentence.

>"Spots," though, was a whole different animal from the rest. That suicide attempt took place only about two months ago; ....
***wait hold the phone....are you serious???? Did this really happen only two months ago?

> I've never written anything that has taken so much out me; I was deeply depressed, a real mess, for about two days after it went up on the site.

**Okay what are the docs saying is your diagnosis? Can I ask?

> There are some other images in my head, but honestly, I'm not sure if they are real or imagined, so I left them out. Whew! I didn't mean to write a treatise here. Sorry about that. But I hope this answers some of your questions. Take care. Atticus
***I am here reading every sentence....You are something special.
I guess everybody who knows you can say that.
I love your work and would love to support you in doing more writing.
I am an artist as well and I love your writing.
If I have not read anything you've written yet please bring it on.
Thank you so much for this unique opportunity.
Jai Narayan


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