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poem ... A Bullet's Piercing Prayers

Posted by Atticus on January 14, 2005, at 14:49:32

A Bullet’s Piercing Prayers

Delicious vicious feral floral
Thorned crowns
Line Holy Ghost windows down at Saks,
Haute couture
Calvary fashion drenched with passion,
Pocked with
A bullet’s piercing prayers
Spat out
In spongy wads of words
Punched from
Holes in a dead man’s head,
Adorned with
Easter egg skull fragments
To mark
The sacred punctuation spelled
In spilled
Fly-festooned maroon blood,
To tell
A story still unfolding
Like a
Quivering lily lying prone in a
Spreading
Puddle of lovely crimson tide,
Rippling
Whispers across millennia
About
A prisoner’s final scorching gasp,
But the
Killing hills still stand
In the
Present as in the past.
--Atticus

 

Re: poem ... A Bullet's Piercing Prayers » Atticus

Posted by alexandra_k on January 15, 2005, at 23:05:33

In reply to poem ... A Bullet's Piercing Prayers, posted by Atticus on January 14, 2005, at 14:49:32

Thankyou Atticus, that was great. Glad you are writing again :-)

 

Re: poem ... A Bullet's Piercing Prayers » Atticus

Posted by lydia on January 16, 2005, at 13:06:35

In reply to poem ... A Bullet's Piercing Prayers, posted by Atticus on January 14, 2005, at 14:49:32

orgasmic.

 

Re: poem ... A Bullet's Piercing Prayers » Atticus

Posted by saw on January 17, 2005, at 0:37:50

In reply to poem ... A Bullet's Piercing Prayers, posted by Atticus on January 14, 2005, at 14:49:32

Wow - good one!! My husband's mistriss is his gun (collection). He is an avid combat shooter received two trophis for most improved shooter (2004). Very proud of him. I am going to print this out to read to him. He will love it.

Sabrina

 

Re: poem ... A Bullet's Piercing Prayers » alexandra_k

Posted by Atticus on January 17, 2005, at 18:58:47

In reply to Re: poem ... A Bullet's Piercing Prayers » Atticus, posted by alexandra_k on January 15, 2005, at 23:05:33

Hi Alex!
Glad you liked it. I guess I just felt more like I needed the interaction of Social more than writing for awhile. But now I'm feeling the creative urge bubble up again, which is nice. Ta. ;) Atticus

 

Re: poem ... A Bullet's Piercing Prayers » lydia

Posted by Atticus on January 17, 2005, at 19:00:53

In reply to Re: poem ... A Bullet's Piercing Prayers » Atticus, posted by lydia on January 16, 2005, at 13:06:35

Well. Hmmm. How do I respond to such pithy high praise like that? Thanks, luv. Ta. ;) Atticus

 

Re: poem ... A Bullet's Piercing Prayers » saw

Posted by Atticus on January 17, 2005, at 19:36:57

In reply to Re: poem ... A Bullet's Piercing Prayers » Atticus, posted by saw on January 17, 2005, at 0:37:50

Thanks, Sabrina. So good to have you back. I’d say this poem is really anti-war and anti-violence rather than anti-gun per se. (Although my personal stance is against private gun ownership in the U.S., I don’t like to cram my opinions about it down anyone’s throat. Besides, you’re talking about target shooting – which I consider a hobby or sport, depending on the shooter’s skill level – rather than killing people in a combat zone.) Here I was attempting to draw a parallel between Easter and Jesus’s death (the holes in Jesus’s head being from the crown of thorns rather than bullets) and the fact that the Middle East is as much a killing zone as it was two millennia ago – perhaps more so – as the innocent and the brave continue to fall. I really appreciate your writing to me, and I hope you’re continuing to do well. ;) Atticus


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